Racism
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Still 250 years racism
A women left the lift when you enter, a man whit his child change his place when you come, and you are advised to go to a cheaper restaurant when you enter a luxurious restaurant. That are examples of daily racism in the United States of America. But is not this racism situation come better after the first black president of United Stated was elected? It is a well-known fact, that the racism is a problem in USA. It began with the slavery. But the slavery is really not the explanation for the start of racism. The racism is a result of the politic in this time. There the white governments saw that the white people are more worth. So they changed the relationship between the white workers who has worked with the slaves and the black people. From this day the white people were the owner of the slaves. This period of racism was finished after the civil war in the 19 century. Than the period of the racial segregation began. In that time the black people were not slaves anymore but they were only humans of the second (ore bellower) class. During this time it gave a lot of arbitrary murder through the FBI and other government security organizations. That might explain the bad relationship between black people and the police. Nowadays it still gives murder to black people for example the murder in Ferguson, the murder to the 17-years old Tyson or the murder to an kiosk owner in New York. In all these instances the murderer are police mans, all victims are innocent and all murderer are not made guilty. Furthermore in statistics the black peoples are poorer, more unemployed and it gives thrice black people in prison than white people despite just 25 percent of the Americans are black.
Although this facts it gave a development. But it will be a long way, and it seems to me that it will last as long as the slavery and the racial segregation. Maybe in someday the dream of Martin Luther King will be reality: “It will give a world, where little black boys and girls and little white boys and girls can held hands.
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Still 250 years (Hier fehlt eine Präposition) racism
Das fängt schon in der Überschrift an. Was soll das auf Deutsch heißen.
A women (= Plural) left the lift when you enter (Zeiten passen nicht zusammen), a man whit his child change his place when you come, and you are advised to go to a cheaper restaurant when you enter a luxurious restaurant.
That are examples of daily racism in the United States of America. But is not this racism situation come better after the first black president of United Stated was elected?
It is a well-known fact kein Komma that (---) racism is a problem in USA. It began with (---) slavery. But (---) slavery is really (Position) not the explanation for the start of racism. (---) racism is a result of (---) politic in this time.
There the white governments saw that (---) white people are more worth. So they changed the relationship between the white workers who has worked (Zeit) with (Präposition) the slaves and the black people. From this day Komma (---) white people were the owner (Plural) of the slaves. This period of racism was finished after the civil war in the 19 century. Than the period of the racial segregation began. (Word Order)
In that time Komma (---) black people were not slaves anymore but they were only humans of the second (ore bellower) class. During this time Komma
it gave a lot of arbitrary murder through the FBI and other government security organizations. That might explain the bad relationship between black people and the police. Nowadays Komma
it still gives murder to black people Komma for example the murder in Ferguson, the murder to the 17-year(---) old Tyson or the murder to (s.o.) an kiosk owner in New York. In all these instances Komma the murderer are (Zeit) police mans, all victims are innocent and all murderer are not made guilty. Furthermore Komma in statistics (---) black people(---) are poorer, more unemployed and it gives thrice (veraltet) black people in prison than white people despite just 25 percent of the Americans are black.
Although
this facts it gave a development. But it will be a long way, and it seems to me that it will last as long as the slavery and (---) racial segregation. Maybe in someday the dream of Martin Luther King (besser: s-genitive) will be reality: “It will give a world, where little black boys and girls and little white boys and girls can held hands.
Bei it give / it gave rollen sich mir die Zehennägel auf;
es muss there is / there are bzw. there was / there were heißen!!!
Das Fettgedruckte muss korrigiert werden. Ich hoffe, ich habe nichts übersehen.
Für das Vokabular und die Rechtschreibung empfehle ich ein gutes (online) Wörterbuch, z.B. pons.com,
für die Grammatik ego4u.de und englisch-hilfen.de.
:-) AstridDerPu
PS: Eine 6 darf nicht vergeben werden, da du ja etwas geschrieben hast. Mehr als eine 5 - ist aber nicht drin.
Ganz ehrlich? Grausames Englisch voller Fehler. Warum schreibt Ihr alle nicht Englisch statt einen schlechten deutschen Text durch den google Übersetzer zu jagen?